First Sentences

I know we’re way past this, but today I started thinking about first sentences in novels.  They’re what pull you in to the story.  They set the tone for the entire book.  They’re like the entryway of a house.  They greet you, they give you a brief feeling of what the rest of the house is going to be like, and they let you know whether you should be taking your shoes off or not.

While the logical thing would  be to begin at the beginning, first sentences seem to have the most appeal when they begin in the middle of things.  While “once upon a time” works for fairytales, it doesn’t always have the draw that we look for in a novel.  Some of the best books I’ve read begin where the action starts, and makes it impossible for me to put it down.

Let’s take for example Eat, Pray, Love by Elizabeth Gilbert.  Her novel begins with: “I wish Giovanni would kiss me.”  The reader’s immediate response is to read on.  Who is Giovanni?  Is he going to kiss her?  Maybe it’s just me, but I don’t think her opening line would have been nearly as effective if it had begun with her living a normal suburban life with her husband, telling the story in chronological order.  Bringing Giovanni in right away gives it an edge of sexiness – a little bit of excitement.  It’s brilliant.  Fortunately for her, the rest of the story follows suit.

Another great example: My Sister’s Keeper by Jodi Picoult.  “When I was little, the great mystery to me wasn’t how babies were made, but why.”  Doesn’t this instantly make you wonder why she is wondering about babies?  If this story had begun from the beginning, it would have started before her birth, and wouldn’t have created such a sense of mystery.  This opening creates questions in our minds and urges us to read on.

Here are some other great openings.  Hopefully some of them will inspire you.

The Lady with the Dog by Anton Chekhov

They were saying a new face had been seen on the esplanade: a lady with a pet dog.

The Blue Men by Joyce Williams

Bomber Boyd, age thirteen, told his new acquaintances that summer that his father had been executed by the state of Florida for the murder of a Sheriff’s deputy and his drug-sniffing German shepherd.

Gesturing by John Updike

She told him with a little gesture he had never seen her use before.

Covering Home by Joseph Maiolo

Coach discovered Danny’s arm when Danny’s parents were splitting up at the beginning of the season.

Exchange Value by Charles Johnson

Me and my brother Loftis came in by the old lady’s window.

Judgment by Kate Wheeler

When Mayland Thompson dies he wants to be buried with the body of a twelve-year-old girl.

The Remission by Mavis Gallant

When it became clear that Alec Webb was far more ill than anyone had cared to tell him, he tore up his English life and came down to die on the Riviera.

Inventing the Abbots by Sue Miller

Lloyd Abbot wasn’t the richest man in our town, but he had, in his daughters, a vehicle for displaying his wealth that some of the richer men didn’t have.

The Lost Cottage by Davide Leavitt

The Dempson family had spent the last half of June in a little rented cottage called “Under the Weather,” near Hyannis, every summer for twenty-six years, and this year, Lydia Dempson told her son, Mark, was to be no exception.

Nickel a Throw by W.D. Wetherell

These are the things Gooden sees from his perch eight feet above the dunking tub at the Dixford Congregational Church’s Charity bazaar.

Medley by Toni Cade Bambara

I could tell the minute I got in the door and dropped my bag, I wasn’t staying.

The Handsomest Drowned Man in the World by Gabriel Garcia Marquez

The first children who saw the dark and slinky bulge approaching through the sea let themselves think it was an enemy ship.

The Winter Father by Andre Dubus

The Jackman’s marriage had been adulterous and violent, but in its last days they became a couple again, as they might have if one of them were slowly dying.

Appaloosa by Sharon Sheehe Stark

My father’s girl friend’s name was Delores and my mother went by Dusie because she was one.

A School Story by William Trevor

Every night after lights out in the dormitory there was a ceremonial story-telling.

Forgiveness in Families by Alice Munro

I’ve often thought, suppose I had to go to a psychiatrist, and he would want to know about my family background, naturally, so I would have to start telling him about my brother, and he wouldn’t even wait until I was finished, would he, the psychiatrist, he’d commit me.

Cathedral by Raymond Carver

This blind man, an old friend of my wife’s, he was on his way to spend the night.

Some of these examples are borrowed from What If? by Anne Bernays and Pamela Painter.

What To Do When You’re Stuck

Sometimes you’ll get to a point in your novel when you don’t know what comes next. We’ve all been in this situation, and it can be frustrating. This is the point when many aspiring authors will be tempted to quit, or just put it down for a while until inspiration strikes. Don’t allow yourself to stop. Inspiration is much more likely to strike you while you are writing. It’s best to work through the block. The easiest way to do that is to write with the end in mind. Figure out how you want your story to end, and work towards that.

The twelve-scene diagram is a tool that is very helpful in determining what needs to happen next in your story. The best part about it is that you can do it yourself. Here’s how it works. Get out a piece of paper and number it from one to twelve. Number one will be your opening scene. Number twelve will be your closing scene. All of the numbers in between are what will get you from point 1 to point 12. As you write, fill in the scenes that you’ve already written. This will help you figure out what comes next. For most novels, you’ll want to use something close to the following format:

1. Hero at home living every day life

2. Hero’s belief system changes due to some outside influence

3. Hero consults friends/family/mentor

4. Hero wrestles with choices

5. Hero attempts to make a fresh start or implement a new way new way of thinking

6. Hero is tested

7. Hero is tested again

8. Hero suffers a major setback

9. Hero recovers and improves

10. Hero is on the brink of accomplishment

11. Hero confronts the antagonist

12. Hero succeeds

If you don’t know quite know all of the specifics about how your story is going to end, that’s fine. But if you have absolutely no idea what is going to happen, maybe it’s time to start thinking about that. You don’t have to stick with that ending, but at least it will get you writing in a certain direction. Sometimes characters surprise you and maybe things will turn out differently than you anticipated. That’s fine. Nothing is set in stone until your novel is published and on the shelf at Barnes and Noble.

The point of this exercise is to get you writing towards something. This will help to advance your plot at a more exciting pace. It will also create a sense of purpose and excitement in your writing. Another reason to use this method? It allows you to throw in some foreshadowing, something you wouldn’t be able to do if you didn’t know what was going to happen. Your readers will love that.

Happy Writing!

Elements of a Best-Seller

Today I want to discuss the elements of a bestseller. Obviously, not all bestsellers can be considered great literature, but what most of them have is a story that keeps you hooked and wanting to read more. The way they accomplish this is by keeping the story moving. We’ve talked in the past about keeping the reader in the action, and that’s exactly what you’ll notice when you’re reading a bestseller.

Let’s take, for example, the Twilight series. Whether you love them or hate them, you have to admit that Stephenie Meyer is pretty good at keeping the reader caught up in the story. She throws in little bits of suspense here and there to keep the reader hooked. And it works. Even though nothing too bad ever happens to any of the major characters, there is always the threat of something happening to them that looms over the story, keeping the plot moving. That’s what you want to do in your story.

Keep in mind, though, that your readers trust you, and it might not be the best idea to keep foreshadowing action without ever letting it occur. This can become frustrating for your readers after awhile. So plan some kind of action for your story, and write towards it. I once heard someone say that you should always be writing toward your climax. So it might be a good idea to figure out what your climax is going to be right away. It will give you a direction to work in, and not only will that give your story momentum, it will keep you writing.

Probably the most important component of a bestseller is believable characters. Not all best sellers are well written, but they do have a magical way of connecting in an intimate, personal level with the audience. This is accomplished through characters that the reader can relate to. The author Peter Rubie, once wrote that “the story is not about what happens, but the character to whom it happens.” You might have a good plot, but if the reader doesn’t care about the character it happens to, your have nothing.

Make your characters feel like real people. Give them thoughts and feelings and flaws. Make them people that your readers will like and understand. Use your story as a way for your audience to get to know your characters gradually. If you put everything you know about a character right in the beginning, a reader is going to wonder: “why should I care about this character, anyway?” Think about it this way – when you make a friend, you don’t find out everything about them right away. Little pieces of their lives unfold naturally over time as you get to know them. It works this way with characters, too.